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James, a young teenager from the ghetto, experienced an exhilarating, soul-searching encounter with God, which he thought was something to cling to, protecting him from the immoral clutches of the Avenue and that would relieve his feelings of despair.
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James, a young teenager from the ghetto, experienced an exhilarating, soul-searching encounter with God, which he thought was something to cling to, that would protect him from the immoral clutches of the Avenue and that would relieve his feelings of despair. It didn't.
ReplyDeleteJames, a young teenager from the ghetto, thought that his exhilarating, soul-searching encounter with God was something that he could cling to, that would protect him from immoral things, and that would relieve his feelings of despair.
ReplyDeleteJames, a young teenager from the ghetto, experienced an exhilarating, soul-searching encounter with God, which he thought was something to cling to, that would protect him from the immoral clutches of the Avenue and that would relieve his feelings of despair. It didn't.
ReplyDeleteJames, a young teenager from the ghetto, experienced an exhilarating, soul-searching encounter with G-d, which he thought was something to cling to, to protect him from the immoral clutches of the Avenue and to relieve his feelings of despair. It didn’t.
ReplyDeleteJames, a young teenager from the ghetto, experienced an exhilarating, soul-searching encounter with G-d, which he thought was something to cling to, that would protect him from the immoral clutches of the Avenue, and relieve his feelings of despair. It didn't.
ReplyDeleteJames, a young teenager from the ghetto, experienced an exhilarating, soul-searching encounter with God, which he thought was something to cling to that would protect him from the immoral clutches of the Avenue and relieve his feelings of despair. It didn't.
ReplyDeleteJames, a young teenager from the ghetto, thought that his exhilarating, soul searching encounter with God was something he could cling to, protect him from the immoral clutches of the Avenue, and would relieve his feelings of despair.
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